There was once a wonderful flying galaxy turtle with a paradise shell on the top of it, it meant sawing through the air like an airplane just in the galaxy instead.In the paradise little people lived on it could view the beautiful galaxy sky, they went climbing trees,hiking on the hills and swimming in the lakes.
The eyes on the galaxy turtle shimmered with beautiful glitter sparkles.
One day the turtle had lost it’s way around the galaxy,the sky’s were looking different,just all a black sparkling sky, but the turtle kept on going deeper and deeper into the blackness.
In 5 minutes the sky had turned to a cyan blue colour, the turtle shivered with blue fire around it and the eyes flamed purple at the same time.
This is very creative piece and I loved the descriptive words you used!
ReplyDeleteAt the end I got a bit confusing how you just ended it without a conclusion or saying were they now were.
You did a great job with describing what was on the turtle and painted a picture in my head.
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Wow! I love how you included a picture for your writing! I've noticed that after some of your commas you don't put a space, for example 'they went climbing trees,hiking on the hills'. I really like how you used such descriptive words as well! This is a really good piece of writing!
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